Progress and Plans for Project 1

Prior to the conference I was not confident with my work. I knew I had the basis for the story I wanted to tell, but I felt it had little organization. It was more of a reflection of my ideas than a complete work. While reading my writing aloud to Mat I realized that it was not just unorganized, but also repetitive. After reading my writing Mat made a few suggestions that I believe will make my work a stronger piece. One suggestion being to introduce an item in the story ,that allows me to recall memories of a certain occasion, in the beginning rather than in the middle. This will give my story a better introduction an offer the reader some insight to what is going on in the story. Following this I need to add more details about a trip that I had went on within the story. Since a big topic of my story is creating memories with my friends I also need to recreate these memories so that the reader has a better understanding of the connection I have between my friends. This may involve adding dialogue into my story. Following this I believe it would be a good area to introduce the family that the trip was centered around and also to share their emotional story. To end my essay I intend to use it as an introduction to project 2 and explain how this event will affect my actions within the future.